•Example:
–Thesis: “Mark Pagel is correct that language is uniquely human andall his claims are true.”
•Paper then goes on to summarize Pagel’s speech, inserting quotations fromPagel
–A weak thesis statement that demonstrates little insight or individualthought, and an overall essay that is highly expository in merelysummarizing what Pagel has already said.
–Thesis: “As Mark Pagel says, language is uniquely human; althoughother species have their own forms of communication, none are assophisticated as human communication so cannot be classified as‘language.’”
•Paper then goes on to explain why Pagel is correct, using studies of human andanimal communication as evidence that human communication is more complex,and therefore other species do not have language the way humans havelanguage.
–A strong thesis statement that clearly states why the author agrees withPagel, addressing the counterargument that other species also havelanguage. Overall essay supports the thesis statement using concreteevidence from external sources.
–Does not simply repeat Pagel’s claims, since Pagel never examines thelanguages of other species in-depth.